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You ordered two items through the Internet and you received two different items. Write a letter to the manager: Explain about what you ordered Ask why the two other items were different Ask about how would he solve this problem.

Dear Manager, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I have
recieved
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received
 two incorrect
items
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 from my recent online order. My order number is W2734G34. I ordered a camera of Sony
brand
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 and
a
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 HP pendrive, but I got
wrong
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the wrong
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 brand of these products. I am unsure why these happened. To address the problem, I
will
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suggest
you
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that I
will
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apply
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return the
items
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,
you
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 should send me
correct
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items
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. I hope I will
recieve
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receive
 incorrect
items
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 as soon as possible. Yours
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, Rupinder Kaur.

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task response
Be clear on what you ask. State the exact item and the wrong part. Give the order number and what you want the store to do next.
coherence and cohesion
Put ideas in order in your letter. Write one idea per paragraph. Use small links like and, but, then to join ideas.
tone
Polite start and end.
content
It has the order number for reference.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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