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The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the average percentage of greenhouse gas (CO2) emissions
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 per individual in different countries from 1967 to 2007. These countries included Sweden,Italy,Portugal, and the UK. As information is gathered from the graph, in Portugal, carbon dioxide emission is elevated throughout the years, and that range was one ton to seven
tons
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 per person.It represents that in these years, a huge amount of CO2 is released into
environment
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 from industries and vehicles. It is clarified from the graph that in Italy, the range of emission of carbon dioxide per individual increased steadily from 1967 to 2007, and
that
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ranged from 4
ton
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tons
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 to 7
tons
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.
This
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 caused
the
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adverse effects on human lives.That means people changed the
pollution causing
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pollution-causing
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 devices to
environment
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environmentally
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 friendly devices. The interesting point was the fall of the CO2
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in
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 the whole time period in the United Kingdom. In the UK, that ratio decreased from 11
tons
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 to 9
tons
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. Because the higher authorities
forbidden
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 the usage of old vehicles and
also
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 planted
the
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new plants in the state.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tons with synonyms.
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