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Some people believe that people living in the twenty first century have a better standard of living compared to previous centuries. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Undoubtedly, in the contemporary era,
people
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for
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nowadays
living
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live
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 a high-quality life
due to
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 the
countries'
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country's
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 economy soaring and
policy
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policies
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changed
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 over
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time.Some
people
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 believe that
people
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 who
born
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were born
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 in
twenty
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the
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first
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twenty-first
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 century possess a better life
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then
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 before, others do not think so. As for my perspective,
i
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 am in
favor
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 of the former, advanced
technology
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 and comprehensive
education
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 lead to considerable positive influences on
peoples'
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people's
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 lives.
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the
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time goes by and the rapid development of
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technology
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,
people
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 can
utilize
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utilise
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technology
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 skills to improve their ability ,which
they
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can facilitate the firms' economy.To put it another way, office
worker
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workers
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 can use
technology
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 to improve working efficiency, leading to the company's
overall
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 economy
will increase
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 significantly, higher salaries
people
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 can
earned
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earn higher salaries
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.Take
taiwan
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Taiwan
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 as
example
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, modern
coporation
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corporations
 will accept advanced science to promote their skills and
interat
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interact
 with other companies, which they obtain higher income ,
the
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 higher salaries will
allocate
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be allocated
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 to employees,
finally
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faciliating
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facilitating
 their living conditions. Because of the prevalence of the internet, more children are exposed to a great deal of knowledge,
no
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they
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 matter from
the
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rich or
the
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poor
area
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areas
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, obtaining
an
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employment
prospect
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prospects
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.
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, the teenager can stay in a better learning environment easily, receiving a decent
education
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,
obtaining
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 more options to choose their suitable job.
For
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 in Taiwan.
Due to
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 the government policy and
education
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 advocating,
education
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 takes
a
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an
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on
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in
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 juveniles, which
they
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them
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 can have rudimentary knowledge to take some part-time jobs and broaden their
hoizons
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horizons
, bringing more job options to support their lives. In conclusion, based on the aforementioned,it is obvious that the cutting-edge
tehnology
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technology
 and high-quality
education
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 in the
twenty first
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twenty-first
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 century
makes
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make
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people
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people's
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life
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lives
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 more enjoyable and wonderful.

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structure
Plan a clear intro that states your view, and end with a short conclusion.
language
Use simple, short sentences. Check mistakes in grammar and spelling.
content
Give one strong idea in each paragraph and explain it with a small example.
cohesion
Use link words to show how ideas go from one to next.
language
Avoid long, hard phrases. Use common words.
content
Clear position on the topic.
content
Some examples (Taiwan) are used to back points.
structure
Effort to discuss both tech and education.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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