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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph gives information about the number of
tourist
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tourists
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 visiting some parts of
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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 Islands from 2010 to 2017.
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, the
island
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’s total
visitor
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visitors
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 increased steadily almost every year for
whole
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the whole
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 7 years. Starting in 2016, more visitors stayed on cruise ships than on the
island
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. In earlier years, stays on the
island
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 exceeded those on cruise ships. In 2010, the total number of arrivals on the
island
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 went up steadily from 1
million
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 to around 2.75
million
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 in 2015. It
then
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 stayed at
this
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 level in 2016 until it increased exponentially to 3.5
million
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 in 2017. The volume of tourists who stayed on the
island
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 was around 0.75
million
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 both in 2010 and 2011. It
then
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 went up consistently before reaching a plateau of 1.5
million
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which
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 lasted from 2013 to 2017 except for a small dip in 2016. There were far fewer tourists staying on cruise in 2010, at only around 0.25
million
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. After some fluctuations over the following 2 years, the number started rising steadily, higher than those who stayed on the
island
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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