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Band 4

Some people think that big international sporting events are not worthwhile for the host country. Do you agree or disagree?

It is assumed by
number
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 of individuals that worldwide athletics are not much beneficial for the nations
,
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apply
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 where
,
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 they are going to be organised.
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,
this
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 point of view might be true
at
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to
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 some extent.
Therefore
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, in my
opinion
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 there are
bunch
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a bunch
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 of positive developments for
these
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this
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 type of
arrangements
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arrangement
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witin
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within
 the developing countries. To start with, some folks think these
type
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types
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 of
events
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arejust
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are just
 a
wastage
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waste
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 of
taxpayers
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taxpayers'
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 money
as well as
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 increasing corruption within the authorities.
This
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 is why
,
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apply
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 governments have to raise their budgets and funds to provide
world class
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world-class
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infrastructur
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infrastructure
, which may increase the
probabilies
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probabilities
 for the officials to use the
alloted
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allotted
 money for
the
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apply
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personal use.
Moreover
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, they think the money can be used for
taxpayers
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taxpayers'
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 development by providing them the valuable infrastructure for quality of life. To elaborate, in
2010
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the 2010
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 India
commonwealth
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Commonwealth Games
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games
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games,
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 there was
8
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an 8
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million
rupees
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rupee
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 fraud
came
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apply
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at
front
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the front
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and
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, and
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 if
that
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those
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 funds
were
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had been
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 used for
nation's
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the nation's
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development
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development,
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 it might be better today.
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, people
says
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say
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 these
events
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 help to develop
country's
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the country's
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 infrastructure
as
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, as
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 it is questionable for the reputation of the nation. So, authorities need to make
worldclas
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world-class
 airports, better roads and highways
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along
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, along
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 with hospitals and hotel chains.The major advantages they are focused
are
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on are
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 the economic growth of
country
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the country
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, as individuals from all around the world
are visits
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visit
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 their country and
enhancing
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enhance
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 the revenue. In conclusion,
although
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one
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apply
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half of
folks
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the people
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does
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do
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 not
agrees
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agree
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 to host these
events
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 in their nation
due to
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 their point of
views
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view
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.
However
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,
i
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I
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 want to go with the second half as these
type
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types
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 of international
events
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 definitely
helps
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help
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 countries to enhance
overall
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 progress.

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task
In the opening, state your view clearly and keep a brief plan for what you will say.
coherence
Give each idea in one clear paragraph with a topic sentence to show your view.
coherence
Use simple, correct linking words to join sentences and paragraphs.
language
Check spelling and grammar to avoid errors that hide your meaning.
structure
The essay shows some balance by mentioning both sides.
argument
There is a conclusion that states your view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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