The charts below show the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.

The bar chart below illustrates

proportion

Correct article usage

the proportion

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people

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people's

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spendings

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spending

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in a European

dountry

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country

was spent on various services and needs between 1958 and 2008.

Overall

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, it is evident that sales changed a lot in

this

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period of time. Sales of luxury goods fell steadily.

Conversely

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, housing was more viral.

While

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the figure for entertainment decreased,

sale

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the sale

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of clothing was dominant. In 1958, the figure for food was the biggest at around 32%, it diminished in 2008 to just 12%,

while

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housing soared from 26% to 32% having the highest proportion in 2008. Regarding

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apply

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entertainment, in the beginning it was over 12% and it decreased gradually to 8%, yet clothing

stayed

Verb problem

remained

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same

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the same

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two

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the two

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periods.

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contrast, luxury goods

was

Correct subject-verb agreement

were

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the lowest in 1958

Punctuation problem

;

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Linking Words

however

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however,

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Correct pronoun usage

they

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increased significantly in 2008. (18%). Sales of travel and

transports

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transport

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outstripped those of in 1958

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17%.

Bunnijon16

Nov 9, 2025

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

143 words

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The charts below show the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.

Teenagers should have regular exams at secondary school, as this will prepare them better for life after leaving school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In many countries, the tradition of having family meals together is disappearing. Why is this happening? What will the effects of this be on the family and society

Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. what problems does this shortage case? what measures could be taken to overcome these problems?

Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their parent. Other believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.