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The bar chart below shows the percentage of people living alone in five different age groups in the USA between 1850 and 2000.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of people living alone in five different age groups in the USA between 1850 and 2000.
The bar chart illustrates the
percentage
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 of
people
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 living alone in the USA
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across
five different
age
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groups
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 between 1850 and 2000.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
percentage
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 of individuals living alone increased significantly in all
age
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groups
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 over the given period.
In particular
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, older
people
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 showed the highest
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 compared to other
age
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groups
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. In 1850, living alone was relatively uncommon in
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 States. Only about 2% of
people
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 aged 17-26 lived alone,
while
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 the figure for those aged 55-64 was slightly higher, at around 3%. After five years, the
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 of
people
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 aged 17-26 was slightly higher than that of those aged 27-36, at around 3% and 2% respectively. By the end of the period, all
age
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groups
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 showed varying levels of growth.
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, the oldest group, aged 55-64, had the highest proportion, at around 17%.
In contrast
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, the youngest group, aged 17-26, recorded the lowest
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, approximately 5%,
while
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people
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 aged 47-54 reached about 13%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, age, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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