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The bar chart below shows the percentage of people living alone in five different age groups in the USA between 1850 and 2000.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of people living alone in five different age groups in the USA between 1850 and 2000.
The bar chart illustrates the share of
people
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 living alone across five different
age
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groups
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 in the USA between 1850 and 2000.
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it is clear that
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 the percentage of
people
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 living alone increased significantly across all
age
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groups
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 over the period, with the proportion of elderly
people
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 experiencing a particularly dramatic rise. In 1850, the percentage of
people
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 aged 55-60 living alone was the highest, at approximately 3%.
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, the figures for two younger
age
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groups
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 (37-46 and 47-54) were similar, at around 2.2% in the United States. After five decades, an additional
age
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 group (between 27-36) was introduced, with the rate of
people
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 living alone standing at nearly 2.1%. In 1950, the figure for elderly
people
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 saw a significant increase, reaching around 8.3%. In the same year, an additional younger
age
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 group (17-26) was included in the chart, with about 1.9% of
people
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 in
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 group being lone.
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, the rate of single-person households rose dramatically across all
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groups
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 in 2000, with those aged 47-54 and 55-64 reaching the highest levels, at around 12.2% and 16.5% respectively.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, age, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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