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Band 3

Some people say that using animals to test new products for human consumption should be banned in all countries. To what extent do you agree? Give clear arguments and examples to state your stance.

Testing new products plays a significant role in several industries. Customer satisfaction is a goal to achieve without a doubt;
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, animal testing is one of numerous methods.
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,
according to
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 common belief, testing new products on
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animal
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animals
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should be banned as soon as possible. One remarkable reason for going against animal testing is a sense of morality. Since animals are sentient beings, they are capable of understanding pain and emotional suffering
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hence
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testing
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 on animals is not considered
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ethical
labor
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. As an example, studies illustrate that certain animals used in product testing usually have trouble
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reintegrating into their herds. What’s more is
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 kinds of experiments can't be predicted before. There is a possibility that they might cause permanent damage
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 as loss of a part of
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, traumatic experience, and even death. Another remarkable reason is the number of alternative testing methods
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into
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 today’s advanced world. There are some
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 ways to test the trustworthiness of the product. The Quintessential is fake skin or computer simulations. Artificial intelligence can calculate all the side effects of any product. In these circumstances, ıt is crystal clear that animal testing is no longer a need.
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, as long as all the countries have legislation guaranteeing a complete ban, concerns among animal rights activists are likely to continue.

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task response
Make your view very clear in the first sentence of the intro and restate it in the last line.
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Add a simple counter view and then say why you still agree. This shows balance.
examples
Use more specific examples or facts to back up points.
grammar
Fix grammar and word use. Avoid odd phrases like 'quintessential' and fix 'crystal clear' to simple words.
coherence
Use linking words to show order: first, next, also, finally.
stance
Clear view of the topic and a position is shown.
structure
Good structure with intro, body and conclusion.
content
Ethics idea is well used to argue against animal testing.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ban
  • animal
  • testing
  • food
  • safety
  • health
  • cruelty
  • rights
  • ethics
  • lab
  • cells
  • computer model
  • data
  • volunteers
  • rules
  • global
  • country
  • cost
  • time
  • trust
  • progress
  • cosmetics
  • proof
  • alternative
  • other ways
  • test in a dish
  • taste tests
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