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Some people say that distance learning is a quick and effective way to study. Others, however, disagree and say that distance learning programs can never be as good as courses taken in person. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

It is an undeniable fact that
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 to
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 is distance learning. Whilst
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 there is another school of thought that claims that it is not as effective as the
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person
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study
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. I partially agree to the aforementioned statements and will
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 both aspects in the essay. There are several reasons to consider it
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a positive growth, the paramount
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cost
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 of
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. In the modern
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, good education has become a luxury for
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middle
 and lower
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 class of people.
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, in distance learning courses, there is no physical building present for students, which leads to less cost for the institute,
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 fees for the students.
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 the gap between the different parts of the world by endowing the virtual
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existence
 of educational
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institutions
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 of New York,
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, offers multiple online courses to
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students throughout the world.
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 can
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enrol
 themself in a
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study
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where ever
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 they like.
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, the benefits of the trend do not justify that
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 studying is not
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necessary
. It has its own
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, the primary
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 would be
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 skills. A student
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 with a great education
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 to learn how to
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 in
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society. In a physical college,
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 with their classmates and teachers.
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 helps them to build
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 behaviour.
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univertisity
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university
 provides
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all the
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equipment
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 aspects of different courses. which is not possible in
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the case
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 of online learning. To recapitulate,
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 distance learning
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 various positives
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 cost and
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availability
 of different options
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.
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, it is
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unjustice
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 to ignore the
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, as there are many elements of education that can only be possible in
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such
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 as practical knowledge, social skills and so on.

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content
Be clear with your view in the start. A simple line like 'Distance learning is a good way to study, but it has limits' helps.
structure
Use one plan: an intro, two or three body paragraphs, and a short end. Each para should show one main idea.
coherence
Link your sentences with easy words like and, but, so, also to show flow.
language
Fix easy spelling and grammar. Use short, clear words.
evidence
Give clear examples and explain how they show your point.
content
The writer tries to discuss both sides of the issue.
structure
There is an intro and a conclusion.
evidence
There is a real example of online courses.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • **Useful Vocabulary:**
  • 1. **Distance learning**: A way of studying where tuition is carried out over the Internet or other electronic media.
  • 2. **Flexible schedule**: Time-table that allows students to manage their own study hours.
  • 3. **Remote access**: The ability to access educational content from any location.
  • 4. **Cost-effective**: Economical; good value in relation to the money, time, or effort spent.
  • 5. **Digital literacy**: The ability to effectively use digital tools and platforms.
  • 6. **Self-discipline**: The ability to control one's behavior, emotions, and thoughts in the pursuit of long-term goals.
  • 7. **Hands-on experience**: Practical experience in a field of study, usually gained through physical participation.
  • 8. **Technological barriers**: Challenges related to the availability or use of technology.
  • 9. **Employer perception**: The way that employers view or regard a qualification or skill.
  • 10. **In-person interaction**: Face-to-face communication and engagement.
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