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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing games together is a good way to build closer relationships. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.

Practicing
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 activities like
games
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,
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 can help you make
firends
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friends
 in the future, and
closen
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close
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 your relationships with others. I very much agree with
this
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 statement. Mainly because
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 it is the funnest way to
intract
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interact
 with people.
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, competition activities always show all aspects of
charecter
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character
. Spicing things up with
games
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 like
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 arcade, video
games
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, etc, can help you have so many conversations.
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, you'll get to know the other person better, know their past, and potentially talk about common things. Doing so
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 will show you the other person's way of thinking. Possibly, relating to them with some
point
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 of
views
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view
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, and it will tell things you both like. Many competitions
like
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, like
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 sports, have made so many people get to know each other.
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, running groups
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 and sport academies
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 have so many
intresting
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interesting
 individuals you can get to know
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 and talk to. Potentially, surround
you
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yourself
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 with people with the same
intrests
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interests
of
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 the sport you like.
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, to back up my point, we see so many athletes
that
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who
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 had great competitions, like tennis stars, Nadal and Rodger federer, have great
realtionships
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relationships
 during their time of playing and after
retiremen
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retirement
. With years of playing each other
competitivly
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competitively
. Eventually, they found a lot of common personality traits. In conclusion, yes, so many long-term friends got to know each other from
games
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. I love
this
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 type of
engagements
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, because it's fun to do and it can result
with
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in
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 future relationships.
group
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 activities nowadays
,
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 are
the
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the best way to get to know others.

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planning
Plan your essay in three parts: opening that shows your view, two minutes of body with reasons and one clear example, and a short end.
language
Use only short, clear sentences. Check simple spelling and grammar.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas, like and, but, so, therefore.
content
Give clear and real examples that fit the task.
task response
Your view is clear from the start.
coherence
You use examples from sport to back up your point.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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