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Some people say that every human being can create art, for example painting. Others think only the people born with the ability can create art. Discuss both view and give your opinion?

It is stated by some individuals that everyone is capable of artistry,
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others perspective only
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 born with certain traits are capable of generating art. In
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, I will be discussing both the
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 providing my own opinion. First and foremost, every human being
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 some artistic qualities which they can use in painting, singing, and dancing as long as they have a goal in
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mind to achieve.
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 some
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 enhance their abilities by consistent efforts and
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 over a long period of time.
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, everyone can learn how to draw a painting
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 in order to make a flawless painting with correct expressions and realistic effects, it requires a huge amount of practice.
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, some
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 have strong abilities that make them fast learners. They are usually ahead of some
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, but in order to become successful in their own field, they should be determined to dedicate a huge amount of time
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 their skills and rectifying their own flaws.
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, it will help them
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 name popular in their own field and gain popularity
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, if you have a talent and you are not working constantly to nourish and enhance your skills, you will be
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those who put extra
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 to boost their skills. In conclusion,
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 have some inborn traits which
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 them to understand and utilise resources way faster than others. In my opinion,
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talent alone is not enough
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 a great amount of dedication and consistency to become great in life.

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The essay tries to cover both sides of the issue and gives a view.
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It follows a clear form: intro, body, and conclusion.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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