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The tables give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The tables give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The tables illustrate how much Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
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 and bananas were sold in five European countries in 1999 and 2004.
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, both
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 and banana
sales
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 increased in most countries over the five-year period. The biggest growth in
coffee
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sales
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 was in the UK,
while
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 Switzerland saw the highest figures for bananas in both years. In 1999, Switzerland had the highest
sales
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 of Fairtrade
coffee
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 at €3
million
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, followed by Denmark
around
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, around
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 1.8
million
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 and the UK
about
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, about
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 1.5
million
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. By 2004,
coffee
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sales
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 in the UK rose sharply to 20
million
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, becoming the largest market. Switzerland’s
sales
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 doubled to 6
million
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,
while
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 the other three countries—Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden—showed only small increases.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sales, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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