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The map shows the change of a village called Chorleywood between 1868 and 1994.

The map shows the change of a village called Chorleywood between 1868 and 1994.
The map illustrates the changes that took place in the
village
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 named Chorleywood from the year 1868 to 1994.
Overall
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, the road network increased a lot over the period
and
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, and
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motorway
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the motorway
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 expanded all over the
village
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 from
the
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apply
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right to
the
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left of the Chorleywood park .
Moreover
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, the
railway
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 route
had
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was
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 established in recent years. From the year 1868 to 18883, there were only two main roads crossing over at the
noth east
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northeast
 of the
village
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. After
the
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apply
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1882, in
1883
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1883,
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 motorways were started to
build
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be built
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 on the left side of the golf course
and
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, and
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 after the year of 1921, new motorways were established on the south-west side of the
village
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. At
last
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, from
1970
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1970,
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 the work
of
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on
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railway
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the railway
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 was started and it
was end
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ended
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 in 1994. The
railway
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 line was established in the
sourthen
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southern
 part from the east to
west
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the west
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 of the
village
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.
However
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, there was a
railway
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 station between the new motorway.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, railway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • recreational areas
  • conservation efforts
  • commercial areas
  • technological advancements
  • demographic shifts
  • preservation
  • historical buildings
  • evolution
  • residential areas
  • public services
  • economic changes
  • green spaces
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