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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.
The graph provides key information on the number of marriages and divorces in the USA and the marital status in America from 1970 to 2000. The units are measured in millions and percentages. Both of them have important points. It includes four parts , and each part has two items. One of them includes the number of marriages and the number of divorces,
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 the second includes never married, married, widowed and divorced.
Overall
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, the highest ratio of the primary graph was shown in the marriages from 1970 and 1980.
However
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, the lowest ratio of the secondary graph was shown in the divorce
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rate in
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 1970 On the one
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, in terms of the highest changes,
according to
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 the chart, the highest percentage
increased
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 gradually in the marriage rate from 1970 to 1980, by 2.5 million.
Then
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 it decreased dramatically from 1990 to 200, by almost 2 million.
On the other hand
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, in terms of the lowest changes,
according to
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 the given data, the lowest value decreased sharply in divorce in 1070, at about 2%.
However
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, it was increased significantly in 2000,
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 about 8%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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