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Band 1

In some countries, the difference in age between parents and children is generally greater than it was in the past . Do you think the advandtages outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, there
are
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 a trend that marry or raise a child after having a stable
work
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job
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.
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, many
people
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 may tend to get their own
children
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on
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at
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 a
big
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relatively young
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 age. It makes the difference in age between parents and
children
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 is generally greater than it was in the past. Some
people
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 may think that
this
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 situation makes the chatting topics and the thinking
being
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too
difference
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different
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 between parents and
children
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. Some
people
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 may think that
people
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 get their own
children
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 after
the
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considering, they will give a higher living quality to
children
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. In my opinion, I think
this
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 trend has a variety of
advandages
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advantages
.
first
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 of all, the most obvious
advandage
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advantage
 is that
children
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 will have a
greater living
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better
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 quality. When
people
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 tend to have their own
children
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 after
get
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getting
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 a stable
work
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job
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, the economic stress will become less

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task response
Add a clear idea: state your view and say if you think the good points beat the bad points.
language
Use less spelling and grammar mistakes. Check words like advandages, chatting, and overall.
coherence cohesion
Use 2–3 short paragraphs. Start with an easy intro, then two body parts, then a short conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Give examples to show your point and show both sides.
language
Be careful with tense and word form and use simple present or past consistently.
content
You show a clear idea that there can be better life for children when parents have stable work.
structure
You give an opinion with words like 'in my opinion'.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Emotional maturity
  • Nurturing environment
  • Financial stability
  • Health concerns
  • Generational gap
  • Communication barriers
  • Cultural understanding
  • Technological understanding
  • Life experience
  • Physical activities
  • Societal perceptions
  • Social stigma
  • Family dynamic
  • Support network
  • Extended family
  • Professional connections
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