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The maps show the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Write a report of at least 150 words, summarizing the main features and making comparison where relevant.

The maps show the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Write a report of at least 150 words, summarizing the main features and making comparison where relevant.
The maps illustrate the development of Stokeford over 80 years, from 1930 to 2010.
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, it can be observed that the town transformed from a farmland to a residential area as the number of houses tripled. Taking a closer look, in 1930, the town had many cows and a huge farmland area that included shops and a post office. Even though agriculture was the main focus,
Although
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 agriculture was the main focus, there was
also
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 a small primary school and a large house surrounded by gardens.
On the other hand
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, in 2010, significant development had taken place, and the focus shifted as the population increased. Many accommodations replaced the farmland area as it became full of houses and a post office,
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 on the east side, the large house switched to a retirement home. A notable change would be the school, as it doubled in size to keep up with the number of people. The transformation that occurred in the village shows the goal to become bigger.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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