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The illustration below shows fire exit plan in a college accomodation

The
map
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 below shows rescue exits during fires in a university.
Overall
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, the
map
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 shows two different exits and seven
bedrooms
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.
While
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 first point can have access to rescue only 3 bedroom, the second has 4 for them and a lift. As the
map
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 illustrates, northern-west part of the building has 2
bedrooms
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: first and second. Despite, all of other rooms are located on the opposite side: southern-east. There are 2 exits on the corridor: on the western and northern-east side. Lift is located in just a bit southern area of 2nd exit. As we can see,
bedrooms
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 on the western side of the
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 are closer for the first meeting place. Students, who live in
bedrooms
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 1st and 2nd can reach it by just turning right after they leave the room. Third room's door is located unusually, which makes it to just have right turn. Regarding, other rooms are closer for the 2nd exit. All of these rooms should head towards north to reach stairs. When it comes to elevator, that should have to rotate fully to rescue.

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task response
Start with a clear view of the map in one short line. Then give two or three facts about the exits and rooms.
coherence
Use a simple, clear order. For example, talk first about the western side, then the north east, then lifts and stairs. End with a short summary.
language
Use simple words and short sentences. Check word form and grammar so it reads well.
content
The idea of two exits and a lift is shown.
structure
The text tries to show where rooms lie in relation to places.
content
Some parts are easy to follow, like the mention of exits.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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