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Theoretical subjects such as mathematics and philosophy are taught in universities but students prefer more practical subjects such as accounting and computer programming. Some people believe theoretical subjects should be abandoned in universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

At the present time, many educational institutes are offering theoretical
as well as
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 practical
subjects
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 to their students, but students are showing more interest in hands-on knowledge as compared to
traditonal
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traditional
 learning. Some individuals opine that universities should discontinue theoretical
subjects
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more focus
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 on practical learning. I firmly believe that both approaches are equally vital, as theory provides them a strong foundation,
whereas
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 practical knowledge enhances real-world application.
Firstly
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, theoretical
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 like mathematics or philosophy will develop critical thinking skills in them and
also
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 build a base for a practical approach.
Moreover
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, with
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 education, they are able to understand all the essential concepts, terminology, and principles.
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, it will be difficult for a student who hasn't attended any theoretical lecture and goes directly for practical work
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 they might find concepts hard to grasp or fail to solve complex
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 effectively.
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, in the field of healthcare or law , both the
knoweledge
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knowledge
 are equally important.
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, a doctor
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first learn about human anatomy and different
medication
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 for different diseases before performing any medical procedure, same as with lawyer first
they
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need
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 to study all the legal principles and case laws before applying them to real-world situations.
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, theoretical
subjects
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 should not be abandoned
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 universities should give equal importance to both for better learning outcomes.

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improvement
Your view is clear, and you stick to it. To improve, add more clear points about how both theory and practice help in real work, with short, real-world steps.
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Use easy linking words to show how ideas go together. Words like First, Also, For example, In addition, But, In short. Keep each idea in one line.
error-correction
Fix small mistakes in spelling and form. Words like knoweledge and traditonal should be
strength
Clear stance that both theory and practice are needed.
strength
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structure
The essay has a clear start and end.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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