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‏Many students today graduate high school and want to continue their studies overseas. Give the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.

‏In recent years , there has been a huge increase in the number of experts questioning the merits and demerits of
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travelling
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study
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 in other
countryes
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countries
. On the one hand, one significant
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benefit
 is that
students
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 learn
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new things when they harmony with
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a new
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 community.
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, a key drawback is that
students
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 will forget their
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principles
,customs,and traditions. ‏
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there is a point
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to
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students
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students,
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 when they
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finish
 high school
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 to complete
education
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their education
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 in other
countrys
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countries
.
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this
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 reason, it is evident that
students
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 should
study
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 in
strong
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 university
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same
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harvard
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Harvard
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 or
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Oxford
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oxford
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 to become
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intelligence
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students
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.
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,
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amount
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 of parents in
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,
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apply
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 send their
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children
 to
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abroad
 to
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 academic performance.
Moreover
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, all people who
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 in
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Europe
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 or
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Britain
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 will have a new language as they
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 in all societies in the world.
This
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 being the case , if we let our children go to
study
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 overseas. ‏
Nonetheless
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, it must be stated that learn in other
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countries
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is psychologically difficult.
Therefore
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,
it is clear that
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 when
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children
 travel to have a good
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education,
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thier
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their
 parents cannot be
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present
 for four years .
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qatar
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 most parents
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travel
 with their children to be
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 in their university stage.
Furthermore
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, the food in foreign countries
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 delicious for our children
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 must
they
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apply
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complete
thier
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their
 university studies.

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structure
Use a clear plan. Start with a short intro that says what you will talk about. Then write two or three paragraphs for pros and cons. End with a simple conclusion.
grammar
Fix spelling and word use. Use common words. Check the spell of key words.
examples
Give clear examples. Use simple examples like school or cost or life abroad to show your point.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'but', 'however', 'for example' to help the flow.
content
The idea of discussing both good and bad sides is present.
content
Some sentences use facts or examples to back up ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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