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You are studying overseas. You need to return to your country before the end of the semester for a family event. Write a letter to your supervisor. In your letter: Request time off Explain why you need to leave early Reassure him / her that your studies will not suffer Begin your letter as follows:

Dear
Mr.
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 Shah, The purpose
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this
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 email is to inform you about the leave request for attending a family function back home. As
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 I have lived my whole life around my friends and cousins, I have to take time off to be a part of my cousin's wedding in India. My current semester is ending in December
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 I will be back before the
end semester
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 exam. They have been planning for the marriage for more than a year now, and it is going to be an important moment for me. The functions start from 25th November and end on 1st
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December.
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, I will miss one week of classes and physical labs. Since
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 our classes are in hybrid mode, I will not miss a single lecture from all my professors.
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, all my classmates
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 agreed to teach me the remaining laboratory experiments as soon as I
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 back.
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, there will not be any disruptions in my studies. Because it is once in a lifetime moment for me, I am requesting you to grant me 7 days off. I hope for a prompt response as I will have to book flight tickets as soon as possible. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours sincerely, Varun Patel.

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task response
State your plan clearly. Say how many days you need and when you will be back.
coherence and cohesion
Break ideas into separate lines. Use one idea per paragraph.
grammar
Fix easy grammar: 'of this email', 'has agreed to', 'return' instead of 'will be back'.
tone
Be polite and friendly in tone. A short thank you at the end helps.
task response
You state the reason and the dates clearly.
tone
You use a formal tone and proper closing.
coherence and cohesion
You show you will keep up with work.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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