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In many western countries, an increasing number of couples are choosing to have no children. What are the advantages and disadvantages to the couples who decide to have no children.

The world is very
dierent
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different
 today.
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, society has changed a great deal from the past. Many
couples
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 choose to have no
children
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.
This
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 is happening in many
western
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Western
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 countries.
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is
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essay will examine what are the advantages and disadvantages
to
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of
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couples
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 having no
children
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. The
couples
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 with no
children
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 have many advantages.
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they are
less spending
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spending less
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 money.
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,
children
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 need a lot of things like milk,
cloths
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clothes
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,
pampers
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 and medical reviews.
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there is no responsibility.
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 is
due
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to
let
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allow
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them
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to
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live more personal
time
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.
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, the
couples
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 have more
time
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 for fun and travel.
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, the most popular thing that
the
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couples
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are lives
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live is
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freedom
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 lifestyle.
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 is because they are spending more
time
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for sleep
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sleeping
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 and
workout
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working out
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.
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, they don’t feel busy or under stress all the
time
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.
The
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couples
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 with no
children
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 have many disadvantages.
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they feel lonely all the
time
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.
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, when they were in old
age
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age,
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been
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they were
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 alone without any care or support.
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maybe
couples
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 are
suering
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suffering
of
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from
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 some mental health problems.
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 is
due to
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 some
psychology
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eects
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effects
.
Third,
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they have limited
emotional
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emotions
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 because there is no joy and love that
children
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 can bring for them
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Therefore
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. Therefore
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, they feel
lack
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a lack
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 of support.
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, women who have
no
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not
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 given birth maybe they face a risk of certain
cancer
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cancers
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. In conclusion, it is clear to see that many real advantages and disadvantages to
the
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couples
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 who decide
to
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not to
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 have
no
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apply
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children
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.
However
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, there
are
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is are
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 increasing number of
couples
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that
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who
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choosing
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choose
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 to have no
children
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 in many
western
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Western
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 countries.

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structure
Plan your essay. Add a clear start that says what you will discuss and a clear end that says what you learned.
grammar
Use simple and correct grammar. Be careful with articles, plurals, and verb form.
content
Give a clear idea for each point. Use small, easy examples about money, time, and feelings.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, so, also so the flow is smooth.
vocabulary
Do not use many repeats. Stick to common words and simple words.
grammar
Keep tense the same. Check that verbs match each other.
content
The topic is clear and you talk about both sides.
structure
There is a plan with intro, body, and conclusion.
content
Some ideas show you know the result of not having children.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • professional advancement
  • lifestyle flexibility
  • environmental footprint
  • relationship dynamics
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