The pie charts below show the online shopping sales of retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

The data displays information about retail sectors of online shopping sales in New Zealand in the years 2003 and 2013.

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, in 2003 the biggest category of retail was

travel relaited

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travel-related

, though in 2013 it was film and

music relaited

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music-related

. In

2003

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2003,

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the travel sector overtook the chart

making

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it more than one third (36%) of the chart. Clothes and film

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music hovered around the same amount

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24% and 21%. The category of books took the smallest section of the chart because it took

one fifth

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of it (19%).

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, in 2013, the section of marketing for film and music grew to 33%, making it 12% more than 10 years ago. Though the travel department levelled off to 29% but still

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the

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second

largest group. Book department increased compared to 2003 percentage, taking 3% more and being 22% but still staying as one fifth of the data. And

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lastly

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the retail of clothes dropped to being the smallest section of the data

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petit

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14%.

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Nov 13, 2025

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

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Topic Vocabulary:

Comparative analysis
E-commerce
Retail sectors
Growth rate
Decade
Decline
Trends
Online transactions
Consumer behavior
Market share
Significant increase/decrease
Digital era
Accessibility
User-friendly platform
Market dynamics
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The pie charts below show the online shopping sales of retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

Do you believe that professional athletes make good role models for young people? Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge-edge or experience.

In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. Do advantage of this development outweigh this disadvantages.

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in their advertising,businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products ar new in some way. why is this?do you think it isa positive ornegative developement?

Some people have decide to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages of individuals and businesses ?