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Your friend has asked you to help him/her to find a music teacher for his/her child. Write a letter to your friend that you have found a suitable teacher. In your letter, you should tell: what experience the teacher has why you think he/she is suitable how to get in touch with the teacher. write 150 words

Dear Riya, How are you? I hope
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finds you in good health and high
spirit
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. I'm writing
this
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 letter to inform you about my friend
who
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, who
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 is my
neigbhour
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neighbour
, and a
music
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 tutor in high school, who can assist your child to learn
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music
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 effectively.
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, He is a certified diploma holder in Arts and
music
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, and
having
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a
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15 years of teaching experience in classical and modern
music
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. He recently got promoted from primary to secondary section at ST Mary's
school
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school,
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 where his
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expertise is in guitar, piano, and tabla.
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, he is
patience
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 enough to listen and understand the
difficulty
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difficulties
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 of
student's
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students
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,
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while
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 learning
music
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.
Furthermore
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, his classes are engaging and entertaining at the same time
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 his unique teaching technique. I have his personal phone number
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 is 0090909090, and
lives
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he lives
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 right across my house. Try to give my reference so that he would
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be able
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 to give a concession on
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the tutor
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 fee.
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,
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 is better to contact him after 5 pm
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the
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weekdays because he usually
get
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 free at that time. I hope to see you soon
and
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, and
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 if you have any
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queries
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query
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query,
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then
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to reach out
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reach out to
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 me via phone. Bye, Lodi

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The letter shows the teacher's work and the things he can do.
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It gives a phone number and time to call.
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It is friendly and starts and ends with a good note.
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