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The pie charts below show the electricity generation by source in China and Spain in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the electricity generation by source in China and Spain in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie chart illustrates the percentages of the
electiricity
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electricity
 production by fuel source in a certain country.
Overall
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, it is obvious that
,
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apply
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 nuclear
energy
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 production became more popular two decades after in France.
In
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contrast
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contrast,
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 other methods for reaching
to
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apply
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the
energy
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unfortunately
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, unfortunately
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,
losted
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lost
 their counts sharply. In 1990, nuclear
energy
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 was the fourth most
usual
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common
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 method for producing
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energy
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energy,
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while
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 coal, oil and natural gas were more dominant.
Whereas
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, in 2010, nuclear power counted as nearly three times bigger than
old
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the old
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 version of it.
On the other hand
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, coal, oil and gas lost a
significiant percantage
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significant percentage
 of their
energy
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productions
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production
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. In 2010, coal and oil accounted
by
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for
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 13% which decreased
over
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by over
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 10%. They
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were dramaticially
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dramaticially
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dramatically
overtooken
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overthrown
 by
the
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apply
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nuclear
energy
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.
Also
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, the hydro power
affected
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is affected
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 by the nuclear
energy
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. It dipped
until
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to
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 2% and lost %4 of its value.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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