The charts below show the use of water for agriculture products in Australia in 2004 and values of these products to the Australian economy in the same year.

The charts below show the use of water for agriculture products in Australia in 2004 and values of these products to the Australian economy in the same year.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the use of water for agriculture products in Australia in 2004 and values of these products to the Australian economy in the same year.
The pie charts compare seven categories of
water
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cost and
income
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for
agriculture
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products in Australia in one year.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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while
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livestock
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and
fruit
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used the largest part of
water
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, dairy and
fruit
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accounted
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highest percentage of
income
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.
In contrast
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,
livestock
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and rice used a significant amount of
water
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but contributed very little to the
income
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. Regarding
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cost,
livestock
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use the most
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account
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at 36%, second is dairy at 29%.
Fruit
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and sugar
also
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had high
water
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costs, accounting for 15% and 8% respectively.
However
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, when looking at their
income
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, these products did not perform as well.
Livestock
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only provided 4% of the
income
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, and the
income
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from rice was the lowest at only 1%.
On the other hand
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, vegetables and
fruit
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were much more efficient. Vegetables used only 5% of the
water
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but produced 17% of the
income
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.
Similarly
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,
fruit
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contributed 20% to the economy
while
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using 15% of the
water
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cost.
Additionally
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, dairy and crops showed a balanced trend, with crops generating the highest
income
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share at 30% despite using only 4% of the
water
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, income, livestock, fruit with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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