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The given bar graph shows the estimated continent-wise increase in food production (in million MT) needed to feed the world population in 2045. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar graph shows the estimated continent-wise increase in food production (in million MT) needed to feed the world population in 2045. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the estimated growth in
food
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production
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 based on continent, like
africa
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Africa
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,
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asia
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Asia
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,
north
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North America
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america
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,
south
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South America
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america
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 and
europe
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Europe
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, required to feed the world population in 2045,
unit
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units
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is
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are
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 in
million
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 metric
tonn
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tons
.
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Overall
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overall
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overall,
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africa
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Africa
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reqires
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requires
highest
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the highest
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million
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 metric
tonn
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tons
 of
food
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production
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 to feed
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the worlds
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worlds
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world's
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 population in 2045, which is
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the heghest
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heghest
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highest
amount
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 as compared to other
countries
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countries,
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while
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europe
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Europe
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 needed almost less
amount
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 of
production
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,
where as
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whereas
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asia
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Asia
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 and
south
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South America
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america
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 needed
same
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the same
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amount
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 as opposed to
north
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North America
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america
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.
To begin
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 with
the
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apply
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africa
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Africa
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, it
reqires
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requires
 to produce 400
million
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 mt of
food
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 in 2045,
while
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the
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apply
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asia
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Asia
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 and
south
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South America
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america
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accounted
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account
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around
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for around
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 50 mt to feed the global population in 2045
, compared
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. Compared
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 to
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asia
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Asia
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 and
south
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South America
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america
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america,
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 it requires
production
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 almost half
which
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, which
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 is around 25
million
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tonn
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tons
europe
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. Europe
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 it is
required
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requires
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 to produce
the
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a
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 negligible
amount
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 of
food
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copmared
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compared
 to all continents
which
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, which
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 stood at about 10
million
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 metric
tonnes
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tons
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, production, asia, america, million, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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