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The line graph show of amount of carbon dioxide emissions in 1976 to 2007 in four countries united Kingdom, Sweden Italy and Portugal.

The line graph show of amount of carbon dioxide emissions in 1976 to 2007 in four countries united Kingdom, Sweden Italy and Portugal.
The line chart illustrates the total amount of carbon dioxide emissions measured in metric
tonnes
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 in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1976 to 2007.
Overall
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, the UK has maintained a clear lead over other countries,
while
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 Sweden
had
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obsereved
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observed
lowest
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the lowest
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 pollutants throughout the year.
To begin
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 with, in 1967, Portugal stood
at
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in
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last
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 position with less than 2 metric
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whereas
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,
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apply
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 Italy had
resulted
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apply
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slightly more than 4 metric
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.
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, the figures for both
the
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apply
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countries observed a gradual increase in 1997
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, noticing
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noticing
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reaching
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 6 metric
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 and 7 metric
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 respectively. In 2007, there were minimal fluctuations recorded with 8 metric
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 and nearly 6 metric
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.
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, Sweden reached its peak in 1977 with more than 10 metric
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carbon
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of carbon
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 dioxide and from 1987 to
2007
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2007,
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 the figures observed a sharp decline that
resulted
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resulting
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less
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in less
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 than 6 metric
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 in the final year.
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, the figures for
UK
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the UK
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 remained constant with minimal changes till
1977
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1977,
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 with approximately 11 metric
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and
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, and
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 the graph declined in the final year
with
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, with
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 less than 10 metric
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carbon
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of carbon
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 emitted.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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