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The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates the
oil
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production
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as well as
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 the
consumption
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 in
China
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 over the period
from1982
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from 1982
 and 2006.
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Overall
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 the line graph shows that
oil
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production
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 and
consumption
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 in
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china
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China
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flactuated
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fluctuated
 during
this
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 period . In detail, before 1990,the
consumption
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 of
oil
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maintained
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remained
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 stable at 2
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millions
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million
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of
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oil
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barrels
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 per
day
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while
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oil
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production
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 rose slightly from 2 to 3
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Millions
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barreles
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barrels
 per
day
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.In the first half of
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the 1990's
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1990's
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1990s
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,the
consumption
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 of
oil
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 in
China
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 climbed from 2
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millions
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million
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barrels
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 per
day
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 to over 3
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millions
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million
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barrels
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 per
day
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 in 1995.
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,
oil
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production
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 stayed steady at 3 million
barrels
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 per
day
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.In the
later
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latter
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 half of
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the 1990's
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1990's
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1990s
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,
oil
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consumption
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increasrd
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increased
 and reached more than 4
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millions
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million
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barrels
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 daily
while
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production
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reamined
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remained
 nearly the same as
the
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in the
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 first half of the decade.Later
between
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, between
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 2000 and 2006
,
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Consumption
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consumption
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 doubled and reached more than 6
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millions
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million
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barrels
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,
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however
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however,
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 the
production
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 remained slightly over 3
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millions
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million
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barrels
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 per
day
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 In conclusion,
oil
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consumption
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 in
China
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 tripled between 1982 and 2006 ,overtaking
production
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,which continued to increase slowly.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, production, consumption, china, millions, barrels, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • oil production
  • oil consumption
  • gradual increase
  • surpass
  • overtake
  • reliance on imports
  • disparity
  • steady rise
  • growing gap
  • significant
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