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The Table graph elaborates, about five different, in three main categories of consumers, and their expenditure in these items, during the period 2002.

The Table graph elaborates
,
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 about five different, in three main categories of consumers, and their expenditure
in
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 these items, during the period 2002.
Overall
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, out of all
the
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three
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 3 categories, there is 3-fold expenditure in
first
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the first
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 category, among all five nations.
On the other hand
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,
Sweden
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 had the lowest spending for all the items except
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 rank the
second highest
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 expenditure for Leisure and Education. The outlay of Turkey is higher than other four countries. To commence, from the first category, Turkey stands leading among other nations, drawing the expense of 32.14%. Followed by
Irland
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Ireland
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, it is just 3.13% fewer than Turkey.
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, Spain, Italy and
Sweden
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 are almost
same
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 buyers for the category 1,18.80%,16.36% and 15.77% respectively. On
contrary
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,
to
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 other countries, for footwear and Clothing, Italy was
strong
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 purchaser, it was 9% in 2002.
However
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,
Sweden
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 was
near to
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 5% less than Italy,
it
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 purchased 5.4%.
While
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 Ireland, Spain and
Sweden
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was
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 with negligible difference. The
last
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 two countries had Insignificant spending for leisure and education
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% and 3.22% . The least was shown by Spain, which was 1.98%

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structure
Start with a simple line that says what the table shows and what you will talk about.
structure
Put the data in order: first by category, then by country.
accuracy
Use the exact figures from the table and make clear comparisons.
vocabulary
Use easy words and keep to simple form. Avoid hard terms.
coherence
Use link words like first, next, then, but to join ideas.
structure
Finish with one short sentence that sums the main idea.
focus
The essay tries to show data from the table.
data
It uses numbers and compares countries.
scope
There is effort to cover more than one item.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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