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Band 2

Many people nowadays travel abroad for their university education. why the people do this?Would you consider doing this yourself and why?

In recent years, most
people
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 head off overseas
for
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to
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going
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further
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on
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apply
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their
education
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. There are several
reason
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reasons
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 that can explain why they do
this
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. The high quality of
education
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 over there and challenging themselves are among them.
This
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 essay will discuss them in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, Educating abroad is of high quality
which
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, which
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 every educator is enthusiastic
for
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about
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that
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apply
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.
This
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 is because it can allow
people
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 to find a better occupation later on.
Secondly
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, many
people
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 are fond of challenging themselves.
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, living independently and
assume
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 a responsibility alone can be the reasons that travelling abroad for
education
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 has
turned into
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 a part of their life. I would consider travelling abroad like many other
people
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. I could improve my English through living and connecting with native individuals there.
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Furthermore
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 I could find the opportunity to discover my strengths and weaknesses. In conclusion, the high quality of
education
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 and the chance to challenge oneself are the main reasons why many
people
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 study abroad. I would
also
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 consider doing so, as it would help me improve my language skills and develop as an individual.

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task response
To get a higher score, give more real detail. Explain each point with clear examples and not just one sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Make links from one idea to the next. Use simple words like first, also, in addition, and finally to guide the reader.
content
The essay has a clear view on the topic and a place for personal view.
structure
It uses a clear form with intro, body, and conclusion.
coherence
There are good link words like 'To begin with' and 'Secondly'.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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