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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Some people believe that online libraries are more beneficial than physical libraries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that virtual
libraries
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 have more benefits as compared to physical
libraries
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.
This
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 essay completely agrees with the idea that accessing
online
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an online
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 resource
center
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 is more advantageous than using physical ones. The reason for agreement with the mentioned idea will be presented in the following paragraphs. One
among
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of
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various
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the various
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 reasons is the ability of wider access without time or location
limitation
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limitations
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.
In other words
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, individuals are able to access a vast amount of knowledge worldwide with just a few clicks.
As a consequence
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, it is possible for readers to study or research anytime, without
traveling
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travelling
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 to a physical location.
For instance
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, I once needed a book for my thesis and had to visit the central library, which was quite far. When I tried online, I found the book easily and saved a lot of time. Being environmentally friendly is another advantage of online
libraries
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 over traditional ones.
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 to say, the consumption of paper will be cut down by going online to obtain library resources.
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, in 2020, it was reported in the BMC journal that 75% of people who used to be interested in physical
libraries
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, at present, have become more fond of digital repositories , and
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the use
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 of physical pages
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has
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 been reduced by 60%.
To conclude
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,
this
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 essay confirms that online
libraries
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 not only don’t have limitations in location or time, but
also
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they
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apply
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cannot lead to excessive use of paper.
On the other hand
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, the more online
libraries
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 are opened, the less paper will be produced.

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task response
State your view clearly in the first line and keep to it. Add two clear reasons and give a short example for each.
coherence
Use one main idea in each paragraph. Start with a topic sentence and end with a small wrap up. Use linking words to show the move from one idea to the next.
grammar
Check grammar and use simple form. Watch for subject and verb, plural forms, and odd phrases like 'not only don’t have' or 'cannot lead to excessive use of paper'.
lexical
Use easy words from the top 100 list. Avoid long or hard words that may be wrong. Mention facts or stats only if you are sure they are true and simple.
strength
The writer shows a clear view that online libraries are better.
structure
The essay has an intro, body, and conclusion, which helps the flow.
language use
The writer uses phrases like 'for instance' and 'for example' to back up points.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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