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POVERTY IS EXPANDIND IN MANY COUNTRIES ALL AROUND THE WORLD. WHAT ARE REASONS AND HOW WE CAN OVER COME IT.

In the modern world, in some countries,
poverty
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 is increasing day by day. There are some extreme reasons
behined
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behind
this
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, but it can be removed
by
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with
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 the support of
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 and human beings. The root problem is an inadequate
Education
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. Mostly, in developing nations, there
are
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is
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 a lack of sustainable
infrastuctures
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infrastructure
,
less
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fewer
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 job opportunities, and no funds or
Scholrships
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scholarships
 for
high IQ
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high-IQ
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 level students. The second issue is high health care costs, which
leads
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lead
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 to high bills.
Consequently
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, hospital facilities
becomes
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become
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 unaffordable for
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the poors
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poors
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poor
. An illustration of
this
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,
according to
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 UNESCO, the exclusion of
Afganistai
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Afghan
 girls from schools and
globall staganation
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global stagnation
 in 2023 meant 250 million kids were not getting
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education
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the education
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,
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apply
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they deserved.
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The Goverment
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Goverment
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government
play
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plays
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 a vital role in
elimination
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the elimination
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 of
poverty
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 from a country. Statically, higher
authorties
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authorities
 should provide free
education
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 and health care facilities,
develope
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develop
 new industries and
education
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infrastuctures
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infrastructures
.
Moreover
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, managements need to launch
mortage
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mortgage
 schemes in
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the agliculture
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agliculture
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agricultural
 field. The second solution is
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a human
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human
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humanly
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 significant role in
the
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apply
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society. Generally, citizens can aid in
reduction
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the reduction
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 of
poverty
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,
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apply
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by
statrting
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starting
 a
bussiness
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business
 on a small scale,
scaring
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saving
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expensis
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expenses
 and getting technical
education
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.
Furthermore
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, charity and foreign
investements
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investments
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also
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are also
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benifical
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beneficial
 for people.
For example
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, in the isolated
panademic
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pandemic
, for
reduction
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the reduction
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 of mortality rate, COVID-19 vaccination was available globally, with no cost. In conclusion, in my opinion, there are diverse root causes of the
poverty
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 in several countries,but
goverments
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governments
 and citizens are capable
to eliminate
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of eliminating
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 it, by providing funds and doing
walfare
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welfare
 works, constructing new buildings
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as
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, as
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 well as giving job opportunities.

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structure
Add a clear plan. List the causes first, then offer steps to fix each one. End with a short conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make the link words simple and use one idea per paragraph. Start each paragraph with a line that tells the point.
language
Fix spelling and use simple words. Use easy phrases, not long forms.
content
Give real but simple examples. Use notes like 'schools cost money' or 'jobs are few', not long facts.
content
Some good ideas are shown: role of government, work of people, health and education.
example
The writer uses some facts as examples, like UNESCO and COVID vaccines; this helps the claim.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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