The chart below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The chart below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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of people in Yemen and Italy, categorised in different age groups in the year 2000 and the projections in 2050.
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, in 2000, the two countries had different maturity groups that took the biggest proportion of the population
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however
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, the projections in 2050 show that the same age group will dominate. In Yemen, in the year 2000, 50.1% of the
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were in the youth group between 0-14
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old, making that half of the
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people
living in
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country, but close in second were the people in the maturity category of 15 to 59
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old, taking
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46.3% of the chart.
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, in Italy, 61.6% of the population were
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pupil
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in the ages of 15-59
years
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old, and seniors who are 60
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years and
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plus
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took second place,
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24.1%. In the projections for the year 2050, in both
contries
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countries
the group of people who are in the maturity of 15-59
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old, will overtake half of the population
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,
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46.2% and 57.3%.
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Yemen
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, 37.0
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% of the
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in
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the
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of
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0-14
years
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but
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in Italy, 42.3% of
seniors
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the seniors
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who
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are 60 and older.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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