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The charts below give information on the sales of three different car types in the USA and the UK in 2005 and projections for 2055.

The charts below give information on the sales of three different car types in the USA and the UK in 2005 and projections for 2055.
The data presents the difference for sales on Sports, SUV, and
Sedan
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 cars in the UK and
USA
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the USA
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 in the year 2005, and the predictions for the year 2055.
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, for the USA, the dominating vehicle category changes comparing the years 2005 and 2055, but for the
UK
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UK,
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 the vehicle type doesn't change, but the percentage changes. In 2005, the USA had the most sales for
SUV
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SUVs
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auto
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, making it precisely half of the statistics, but having close in
second,
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are cars that are
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Sedan
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Sedans
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, with 46%.
However
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, in 2055, it is predicted that the
Sedan
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 will overtake the SUV, taking 58% of the market, leaving SUVs in second with 37%. In the UK, in the year 2005,
Sedan
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 vehicles had a visible dominance with 61%, having the other two categories much smaller, 14% and 25%.
On the other hand
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, in 2055,
Sedan
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 auto will still dominate with 46%, but sports vehicles will be 43%, making the two car groups almost at the same amount.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sedan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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