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The diagrams show changes in a student common room.

The diagrams show changes in a student common room.
The given maps illustrate how a
student
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student's
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 common
room
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 has been modified between five years ago and now.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
room
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 underwent significant changes, mainly in the south-east corner and in the
center
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centre
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, where the number of tables
,
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apply
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 and chairs
were
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was
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 replaced with new
furnitures
Correct your spelling
furniture
. Looking at the initial map, at the top of
layout
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the layout
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, there
were
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was
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 kitchen furniture,
such
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 as s sink, a cupboard, two benches, a microwave, and a refrigerator. Moving to the
center
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centre
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 of the
room
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, there were four round tables, which were occupied
with
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by
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 six chairs.
Moreover
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, in the student common
room
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 was a bookshelf
in
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on
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 the south-east side. Turning to
remaining
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the remaining
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 diagram, it is evident that 1 out of 2 benches has been replaced with a new microwave. The bookshelf was removed,
as a result
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, the right side has been opened new spaces for new facilities: three armchairs, a drink, and a television.
According to
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 what is shown, two tables have been replaced with a bench for laptops, and a
rectangle
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rectangular
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 table with chairs.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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