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The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph depicts how much money is earned per year in different cities in the UK
Overall
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, there is a majority of people who earn more in the capital than in all the other cities in the UK .
However
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, in Birmingham, they earn less than anywhere in the bar chart. We can see that in the cities of the UK that are here those who live in London win an average of £33,634 per year, followed by those from Cambridge with £29,854 per year. And finishing with Birmingham with only £25,531 on a yearly basis.
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, Cockneys earn £3,970 more than the average person in Cambridge. There is a lot of difference. After all the other metropolises are more equal, Edinburgh with £27,592 yearly, Bristol with £27,828, Glasgow with £26,150 and Manchester with £25,909.
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, citizens in London earn more money than in other municipalities because it is the capital of the country and all the big enterprises, businesses , and tourism are here.

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