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Writing Samples
Band 1

Topic: Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a big city.

It is usually believed that some
people
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 think that cities are the are think better places to live
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 In my opinion, I
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agree
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with
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 statement ، but some
people
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 may
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have disadvantages
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 of living in a big city .In
this
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 essay, I am going to discuss
this
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 question from both points of view and give reasons for my opinion. On one hand, I have some main reasons for my opinion.My first reason is that ..
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, ..My second reason is that ..
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,
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Finally
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,
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:
this
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 idea can be useful for many
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.
On the other hand
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, many
people
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 do not agree with me. They believe that ..
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, (......
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, ....
Finally
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,
this
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 means that ......
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, there are no easy answers to
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 question.
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 I
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tend to believe that
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 it is important to

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task response
State your view clearly in the intro and end with a clear conclusion that matches your view.
structure
Use fewer long ideas and make each idea clear in one line.
structure
Organize into four clear blocks: intro, two body parts, and a short conclusion.
examples
Give a real example for each point, not '...' words.
coherence
Use simple link words to show flow, like first, also, but, then, finally.
grammar
Check grammar: some words are odd and punctuation is off. Use full stops and capital letters correctly.
idea
The essay tries to cover both sides.
coherence
There is some use of linking words.
structure
There is a plan for four parts (intro, two body parts, conclusion).
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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