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The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007

The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007
The line graph gives information about the
number
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 of
students
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 from the US, UK and Australia studying abroad from 2002 to 2007.
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, the largest
number
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 of
students
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 from the US studied in other
country
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countries
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 throughout the period,
while
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 Australian learners remained
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unchanged
. In 2002, the figure for the US's
students
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 taking education
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abroad was the highest, with
accounting
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a total
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at
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of
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 50.000.
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, after two
years
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years,
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 the
number
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 of
students
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 declined gradually and
experienced at
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reached
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 approximately 48.000.
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, the share of them began to rise and reached
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about 50.000 again by 2007. In terms of
students
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 from the UK, the
number
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 of them was 30.000 in 2002.
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, the figure for British
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 recorded a slight decline and
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 to nearly 22.000 by 2007.
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, the share of learners from Australia experienced the same trend during the period was about 10.000.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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