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The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countriesin 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countriesin 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart provides information about the proportion of the source of
the
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electricity
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in
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sources in
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 four countries in 2003.
Overall
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, fossil
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fuel
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fuels
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were
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dominated in
India
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 and Vietnam to create
electricity
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,
while
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Sweden
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 and
Morocco
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 used hydro
power
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 as their main sources of energy.
To begin
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 with, fossil
fuel
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 was the popular main source of energy to
generated
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eletricity
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electricity
 in
India
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 and Vietnam.
India
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 used 82 per
cent
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 of fossil
fuel
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, the biggest consumption of fossil fuels amongst
Sweden
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,
Morocco
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, and Vietnam. Meanwhile,
Sweden
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 and
Morocco
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only
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consumed less than 5 per
cent
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 of unsustainable energy, the least
porportion
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proportion
 of fossil
fuel
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.
On the other hand
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, some countries like
Morocco
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 and
Sweden
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relied
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 on renewable energies. They used Hydro
power
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 to generate
electricity
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 by more than 50 per
cent
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, and
Morocco
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 was the biggest user of Hydro
power
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 by 95 per
cent
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. Evidently,
India
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 and
Sweden
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has
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 Nuclear
power
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plant
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plants
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,
it
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 contributed 44 per
cent
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 of
electricity
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 in
Sweden
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, and 4 per
cent
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 in
India
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respectively
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.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, fuel, india, sweden, morocco, power, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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