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You have been invited to attend an interview for a place studying a course in a college. Unfortunately, because of a previous appointment, you cannot come at the time they wish. Write a letter to the admissions tutor: explain your position apologise and offer to come on another day or later the same day. ask how long the interview will be and whether there will be any tests during it. You do NOT need to write your own address.

Dear Sir, I am writing to inform you that I
would
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 not be able to attend the appointment scheduled for 11am,the 10th of December
due
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unfortunately
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to another appointment I previously booked for exactly the same time.I have to attend
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 as I am taking my dad to see a urologist for his first appointment
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 I am the only one who can do that. I would like to offer my unreserved apology for
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 inconvenience and would like to inform you that I can be available
for
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 3pm on the day or
any
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at any
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 time
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 convenient for you within the week. The letter sent to me was not quite explicit
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 I would like to inquire how long the interview will
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 and if there are any particular tests to be done on the day.
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 would be a great pleasure if my request is considered
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 I look forward to hearing from you and the team shortly Yours sincerely, Augustine.

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coherence
Make one clear idea per paragraph. Start with a brief reason for not attending, then state the new times, then ask questions.
structure
Structure the letter in 3 parts: reason, apology and new time, questions. Each paragraph should cover one idea.
lexical
Polish word choice. Use common words. Avoid phrases like 'unreserved apology' and 'to inform you' too often.
punctuation
Check dates and times formatting. Add spaces after commas and keep date format consistent.
tone
Keep a formal tone throughout. Use 'Dear Sir/Madam' and 'Yours sincerely' with a comma and your name.
content
Clear purpose: you state you cannot attend and offer an alternative.
tone
Polite tone and close with a proper sign-off.
content
You asked about interview length and tests, showing you are prepared.
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