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The increasing use of social media has significantly changed the way people communicate. Although online communication has many advantages, it also has significant drawbacks. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The increasing use of social media has significantly changed the way people communicate.
Although
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 online
communication
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 has many advantages, it
also
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 has significant drawbacks. On the one hand, social media has made
communication
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 more efficient and less time-consuming. It offers a valuable opportunity to maintain close relationships with family members and friends who live in different parts of the world through video calls and messages.
In addition
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, online
communication
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 provides a high level of flexibility by allowing fast information sharing and enabling meetings to be
organized
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 online.
On the other hand
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, replacing face-to-face
communication
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 has several disadvantages.
Firstly
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, face-to-face interaction allows a clearer expression of emotions that may be overlooked during online sessions. Body language and tone of voice are important components for understanding others, and they are often missing in online
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.
Secondly
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, face-to-face
communication
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 supports the development of social skills
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 as resolving conflicts and clearly expressing ideas. In conclusion,
although
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 social media helps people stay in touch with their relatives and friends, it cannot replace the emotional connection that face-to-face
communication
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 provides. In the long term, relying too heavily on online
communication
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 can lead to serious social problems and a decline in mental health.

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task
Use a clear plan in the first paragraph to show your view. A short intro that states your view helps the reader.
task
Include more specific examples to back each point. This shows you can explain and link ideas.
coherence
Make topic sentences for each paragraph that show the main idea.
coherence
Link ideas with linking words so the text flows well from one idea to the next.
coherence
Balance the two sides and end with a clear stance in the conclusion.
content
Uses both sides well and gives a final view.
structure
The 'On the one hand' / 'On the other hand' frame is clear.
content
Conclusion states a clear view about online vs face-to-face talk.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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