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Some people think that homeschooling is best for children's development while others believe that going to school is important. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is no denying the fact that children can learn effectively in both methods.
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 it is a commonly held belief that
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 should learn by attending classes in school, there is
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 an argument that it is better for
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 to stay at home and learn from their parents.
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 essay will analyse
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 topic from both points and express my opinion. On one hand, one of the main advantages of homeschooling is that it allows children to learn at their own pace. Parents can focus on their
kids
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' strengths and weaknesses, which can lead to more effective learning.
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, homeschooling provides a safe and comfortable
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, especially for children who struggle with bullying or social anxiety.
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, some students perform better when they are free from classroom stress and study in a familiar place.
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, going to school offers several crucial benefits. It is
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 possible to say that schools provide a good
environment
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 for
kids
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 and qualified educators who have experience in different subjects.
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 ensures that people receive a good education.
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, the school
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 gives students the opportunity to develop social skills,
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 as teamwork and communication, by working with classmates. These skills are essential for their future careers and personal growth.
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, group projects and
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 activities help people learn how to cooperate and solve problems together. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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 On balance,
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, I tend to believe that we should give
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 space for household to choose what the best for them. Learning
environment
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 is essential , and both methods are effective and produce good results in the long term.
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, every method has its advantages and disadvantages.

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task response
Make your position very clear in the end and keep it steady all through the essay.
coherence
Use more linking words to show how ideas go together and fix small errors in how sentences join.
structure
Structure is clear with an intro, body, and conclusion.
content
The essay talks about both sides and gives a view at the end.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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