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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss tge advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

In today's world, there is a growing debate revolving around youngsters who are moving out of their
home towns
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hometowns
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 for higher education or
job
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a job
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,
while
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 others argue that it creates pressure on the local people of that country. Migrating to different places for growth in
professional
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a professional
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 journey has many challenges and positive effects.
This
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 essay will
ellaborate
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elaborate
the
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 merits and demerits before drawing a conclusion.
To begin
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 with, the major advantage of
young
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the young
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 generation living abroad is that
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 they get a global exposure and a chance to explore their culture and traditions.
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, experienced professionals have
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a higher
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 package and perks provided by their office.Another undeniable benefit is that individuals take responsibility
of
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 schedules and meetings.
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,
office-teams
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 tend to have less pressure and have
motivating
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a motivating
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 environment. Students pursuing
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a masters
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masters
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master's
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 have friends from different communities that
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impact
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 their thinking ability.
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, many product-based companies in London and Paris offer various activities related to meditation, fitness, and networking.
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, there are
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 challenges that are faced by
inhabitats
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inhabitants
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it
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which
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creates
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create
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 stress and pressure
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due to
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 increased competition.
Although
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government
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the government
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 provides some preference to
indigenous
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the indigenous
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yet
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, they fail to secure
a
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apply
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decent
job
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jobs
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. The root cause of
this
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 problem is that the outsiders are taking their position and creating
lack
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a lack
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 of open roles.
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, major cities like Texas and Chicago
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have
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 having highest number of H1-B visa holders
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who
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 are Indians and Chinese
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, so
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 it creates
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an impact
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 on US citizens. In conclusion, as individuals staying away from their close-knit families
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 results in
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a self-reliant
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 and more focused attitude.
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, it causes depression for the
orignal
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original
 persons belonging to that region and leads to dependency on higher authorities. I strongly believe
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 that one should always migrate to different places as it enhances personality and gives
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the
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 right direction to
career
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a career
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.

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grammar
Fix many spelling mistakes and wrong word use so your point is clear.
task response
Make your view clearer. Say if you think moving is good or not, then give a clear ending.
coherence
Use simple linking words to tie sentences in each paragraph.
content
Give strong, simple example for each idea to show why it is true.
lexical
Keep the word choice to common, easy words to stay within the top 100 words.
structure
There is a plan with an intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.
content
It shows balance by naming both sides of the issue.
content
It uses real life ideas like work and study abroad.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Culture shock
  • Immersion
  • Global network
  • Career prospects
  • Cultural appreciation
  • Language barriers
  • Financial strain
  • Visa and immigration regulations
  • Expatriate
  • Homesickness
  • International experience
  • Stereotypes
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