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Some people sa that modern technology has made shopping today easier. while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinio

People
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 have different views about the online shopping
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.Some
people
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 are in favour of
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 and some are against
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it.Using online
websities
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websites
 for shopping saves
alot
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a lot
 of
time
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,
give
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 more options and varieties of stuff,
it
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and it
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also
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 includes some jobs in
job
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the job
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 market
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. On
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on the contrary
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 side, consumers would not be sure about
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quality
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the quality
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 of items,and
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trend
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 would be harmful for
traditional
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the traditional
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 shopping method.In my opinion,
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 online shopping
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has
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 some negative impact,but
have
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has
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 more benefits. On the one hand,doing shopping through online websites saves consumers valueable
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, as now in
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 fast -pase life,
people
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 have to work more hours to fulfill their needs, so they have not much
time
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 to spend on shopping,
instead
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 of
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 individuals can use
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time
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 to spend with their loved-ones, which would be more beneficial for their mental peace,as they can share their worries with them.
Secondly
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, online websites need a vast network of
people
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 to
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 smoothly,so it provides
alot
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a lot
 of jobs, like delivery,packing , sorting,
customer
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and customer
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 services.
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, through online shopping,
people
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 may not get the best
quality
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 of stuff,as they are getting
second hand
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 experience.
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,if
people
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 order clothes through online
websities
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websites
,they might not be sure about the
clothes
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apply
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quality
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, which may cause
loss
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a loss
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 of money.
Online
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The online
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 shopping
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 is negative for
traditional
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the traditional
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 shopping method.
This
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 is somewhat causing
negative
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a negative
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 impact on physical shops, as
this
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reduce
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reduces
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 the number of customers. In conclusion, shopping through online
websities
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websites
have
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has
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 some negative impacts like bad
quality
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 stuff and
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a
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reduce
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reduced
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 number of customers in shops,but in my
opinions
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opinion
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,
give
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giving
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 more
time
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 to family and increasing jobs in
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the job-market
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job-market
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job market
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 are more beneficial for society and
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the need
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need
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needs
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 of modern
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time
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times
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.

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language
Fix grammar and spelling. Use 'has' with he/she/it and 'have' with I/you/we/they.
structure
Start each idea with a clear line. Use one idea in each paragraph.
content
Give real, simple examples that fit your point.
proofreading
Check small spelling errors like 'websites' and 'valueable' so the text reads clearly.
content
Good aim to show both sides and give your view.
structure
The end shows your own view.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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