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The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2008. Write a report describing the main trends shown in the graph and making comparisons where relevant

The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2008. Write a report describing the main trends shown in the graph and making comparisons where relevant
That
graphic
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show
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shows
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 the number of
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student
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students
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 from
england
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England
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,
US
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the US
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, and
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australia
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Australia
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 studying abroad
2002
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from 2002
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 to 2008. The number of
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student
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students
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 slowly increased,
around
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from around
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 10.000 to 50.000.
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Student
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Students
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 from
US
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the US
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 had an
increased
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, the peak is around 60.000
at
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in
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 2004, and
get
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decreased to around 30.000 2 years later, and
get
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apply
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increased
little
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a little
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 bit
at the end
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 of
period
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the period
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. Meanwhile,
Australia
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 started with a fairly high number, increased in 2003, decreased significantly in 2004, and
then
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 increased slowly again until 2008.
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,
Australia
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 had the highest
student
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 numbers at the beginning and end of the period,
although
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 there was a dip in the middle. The United Kingdom had the most stable growth, increasing every year until
nearly
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it nearly
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catching
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caught
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 up with
Australia
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 in 2008. The United States showed the most unstable growth, increasing rapidly,
then
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 declining significantly before recovering slightly.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words student, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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