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Band 4

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some students believe
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 that focusing on qualification subjects is more valuable
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 than studying other
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in
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subjects in
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 addition to their main course. They are
also
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concentrate
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 their full time and attention
for
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on
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 their university subjects, but is it really better, or not? When you study other things
besides
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 your own course, you
also
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 learn to apply different
knowledges
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knowledge
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 into one. It leads to critical thinking, because you know
full
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information
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the information
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 about properties and etc.
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Also
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 it widens your opinion about a certain subject and even helps to understand the principles more
deeper
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.
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: medicine students focus on Biology & Chemistry, but it is
also
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 important to study anatomy & physics, because their principles
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 mainly connected to human structure.
Other
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 example will be Engineering students. To work with
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construction and creation, you should know the material and the “bonding” between them, so it is important to pay attention to reduce risks of
wastes
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waste
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, not only focusing on calculation and laws of physics. On
other
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the other
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side
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, being focused on certain degrees is
also
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 valuable for studying
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for
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qualification
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a qualification
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. It could
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 interest in the subject and stimulate to discover more. But
also
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, it could lead to boredom, routine life and
burn outs
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. Giving all attention and time is stressful,
harm
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a
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the
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 “overdriving”
for
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of
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a
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the
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 human body.
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, IT learners focus on programming, coding and calculations, but it would be a trouble for them to work with metals without
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ready statistics, because of
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a luck
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luck
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lack
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 of knowledge.
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, their job is mainly
seating
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, so they could have problems with
health
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their health
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is focusing
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if they focus
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for
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on
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all
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it all
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time
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the time
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. To
summarize
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 my thoughts
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 both ways are correct, but it depends
“what
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on “what
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 deed of studying you'll choose. For some
branches
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branches,
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 it is a “must need” to learn different things, but for
other
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others
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 is important to focus on certain properties, knowledge to provide integral information.

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strategy
Make your view clear. In the intro or at the end, say what side you take and why.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph. Start each paragraph with a small topic sentence.
language
Add more clear links like 'also', 'but', 'however' to connect ideas.
error
Check grammar: 'you know full information' should be 'you know full information' but you might say 'you have full information'; fix 'knowledge' countable/uncountable issues. Use 'they' or 'it' consistently.
strength
The essay tries to cover both sides and uses examples like medicine and IT.
strength
There is a concluding sentence that shows an overall view.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Broaden
  • Perspectives
  • Specialize
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Career success
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Structured path
  • Clear goals
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
  • Balance
  • Exploring
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