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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

So the best way of
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assessing
 both points of view would be putting
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ourselves
 in the place of each type of student. Some University students want to
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pursue
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 whilst doing their main subject.
others
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 believe other
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 of time
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 they invest all their time in their main
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so,
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 the best way of evaluating both points of view and finding the
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superior
 method is by putting
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ourselves
 in the place of each type of student. So starting with the students who believe learning about other
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in addition
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therefore
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 they learn about other
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possible
 that the
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pursue
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future
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 just the fact that those extra
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 doing
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so,
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 even if they
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 get a perfect score or their main
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 for the other group of students
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intrests
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interests
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coincide
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rather focus on their grades so they can graduate with a good score and
then
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subjects
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example
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 in my
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experience,
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 I’ve had a much easier time
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focusing
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and
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 just a matter of preference and life situations.

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structure
Make a clear start. State the big idea and your view in the first lines.
grammar
Use less error in spelling and grammar. Check key words many times.
content
Put both views in order and give your own view in a clear end.
examples
Give one or two small examples from real life to show your point.
style
Use small and safe words. Do not use hard or long words.
content
The plan to show both sides is seen.
content
There is a personal feeling in the writing.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Broaden
  • Perspectives
  • Specialize
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Career success
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Structured path
  • Clear goals
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
  • Balance
  • Exploring
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