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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart below illustrates the amount spent on six
categories
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 of consumer goods in
four
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 European
countries
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 in sterling.
Overall
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, Britain spent the highest amount among the
four
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countries
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.
On the contrary
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, Germany spent the least money of the
four
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countries
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. Italy and France stood in the second and third place by turns. Among the six
categories
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, photographic film accounted for the most money spent by the
four
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countries
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, which was about 173
thousand
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pounds
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 sterling in Britain, 166
thousand
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 in France, 156
thousand
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 in Italy, and 147
thousand
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 in Germany.
However
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, in
this
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 category,
four
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countries
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 had almost the same gap with one another, creating the largest differences among the six
categories
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.
In contrast
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, personal stereos had the average money spent by
four
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countries
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, which was around 150
thousand
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pounds
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 sterling. As for residue
categories
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, Britain still had a significant amount among the
four
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countries
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, 168
thousand
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pounds
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 sterling in toys, 162
thousand
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 in CDs, followed by perfumes in 160 and tennis racquets. Italy remained stable in these
four
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categories
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, which spent 150
thousand
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pounds
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 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words categories, four, countries, thousand, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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