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Band 5.5

Some people consider price as most important thing to consider when buying a product or service. Do you agree or disagree ?

These days, individuals have different opinions about how they manage their spending habits, and
this
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 topic is becoming more common in everyday discussions. In my opinion, I firmly believe that the quality of a service or
product
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 is far more important than the price. In the following paragraphs, I will outline the reasons behind my opinion and provide relevant examples to support my ideas.
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 with, the quality of a
product
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 varies from one item to another. 
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for
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For
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 instance, Individuals might spend a small amount of
money
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 on a low-quality
product
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, but after each purchase, the item breaks or stops functioning.
As a result
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, they find themselves repeatedly spending large sums of
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 on the same item;
money
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 that could have been invested in a high-quality
product
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 that would save both their time and budget.
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, there are many good-quality products that can be purchased for a small price, yet individuals need to know which stores provide great items at a suitable price,
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 as local shops, or simply wait for national events to get discounts. Another point to consider is that services which require human interaction are usually expensive. For that reason, people need to be very careful and selective about these kinds of services and try their best to spend their
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 in the right place. In conclusion,
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 some people may have different views, I believe that quality is more significant if it is considered carefully.

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grammar
Fix small errors in cap and full stop. Use simple, short sentences.
structure
Plan the essay: introduce your view, give two or three clear reasons, then finish with a short end.
vocabulary
Keep to easy words from the top 100. Use 'price' and 'quality' in clear way.
examples
Add one clear example to back up your idea, and show how it works.
coherence
Use linking words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'so' to join ideas smoothly.
task response
Your view is stated clearly: you oppose the idea that price is the main thing.
coherence
The essay has a real flow from one idea to the next in most parts.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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