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Band 3.5

Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter ask what types of membership are available, and what the prices are ask what activities are available ask what the joining procedure is

Dear Sir I am writing with regard to
cancel
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cancelling
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 my membership. I will move to another city next two weeks. It takes 5 hours to fly from here to that city. I got a new job in the city I dream
of
Punctuation problem
of,
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 where I have dynamic living and working environments. My membership ID is NU 27362
,
Punctuation problem
.
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 I created
membership
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my membership
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in
Change preposition
from
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 April 2025 to April 2026 . I have been using it for 5 months since I signed up
please
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Please
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 let me know what additional charges may arise.I would appreciate
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it If
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If
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if
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 you need me to provide information or more paperwork Thank you for your help and support Linh

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structure
For logical structure, use a clear plan: open with the reason, then give the facts, then end with what you want done.
format
Use a proper opening like 'Dear Gym Manager,' and finish with a closing such as 'Yours sincerely, Linh'.
paragraphing
For single idea per paragraph, break the text into 2 or 3 short paragraphs, each with one idea.
content
For complete_response, the task here is to check a cancel letter. It does well for cancel, but it does not ask about other things. If you want to test another task, add a second part.
tone
For suitable_writing_tone, the tone is formal and polite. There are a few small grammar points to fix to be clean and clear.
content
Clear reason to leave and exact date, plus member id.
tone
Formal tone overall.
detail
Includes key facts (dates, ID).
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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