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The two maps below show the village of Bunborough in the present day and plans for the village in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the village of Bunborough in the present day and plans for the village in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
the
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The
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 given maps illustrate the region of Bunborough today
as well as
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 the plans for the village in 2024.
Overall
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, many transformations will take
place
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 in the future
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;
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some places will be built,others will disappear ,
while
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 others will remain unchanged. On the one hand, Today , there are many shops near the fishing port and linked by a common path to the road taking from Lynwich to Manchester. Many houses are located near the shops and a beach near the fishing port.
On the other hand
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, in Autumn 2024, the shops will remain in the same
place
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as well as
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 the beach.
However
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, the fishing port will disappear ,
a
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place
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 dedicated to promenade will take its
place
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.
Moreover
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, two hotels will be built, the first will be near the beach and the other will be near the shop ,near a new path .
In addition
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, the
emplacement
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placement
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 of houses will change
due to
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 the presence of new railways , which will be constructed .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Anticipation
  • Significant
  • Conversion
  • Commercial activities
  • Expansion
  • Enhancing
  • Bypassing
  • Congestion
  • Connectivity
  • Recreational area
  • Demolition
  • Infrastructure
  • Preservation
  • Public transportation hub
  • Encourage
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